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Post by Inigo Montoya on Aug 9, 2009 20:55:39 GMT -5
Well, I'll lay odds that I'm not the only one reading. Your story is excellent. You have a clear and funny way of expressing yourself and the story is... well, it grabs me. I love what my old creative writing professor called "your voice." The only reason I didn't comment on the middle part is because I didn't know what to say. It's awesome, please keep writing.  Pleasepleasepleasepleaseplease  |
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Post by aloha on Aug 9, 2009 22:04:57 GMT -5
Well, I'm glad you like my voice, clover I've been nervous about posting this story cuz... well, if you read it I'm sure you know why. It's not the typical dev girl meets wheeler guy. |
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Post by Inigo Montoya on Aug 9, 2009 22:17:50 GMT -5
No, it's not and that's exactly why I like it. :-)
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Post by Ouch on Aug 10, 2009 6:13:38 GMT -5
aloha, changing up the recipe is good, keep writing, one writes for themselves, and then shares the story, not for others. If you like it, then it can't hurt to write it.
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Post by Dee Dee on Aug 10, 2009 10:23:52 GMT -5
Aloha, thanks for writing the story and sharing it with us.
It´s not entirely clear to me, which perspective you´re writing from?
Is it your autobiography or is it devotee fantasies?
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Post by aloha on Aug 11, 2009 7:20:30 GMT -5
Aloha, thanks for writing the story and sharing it with us. It´s not entirely clear to me, which perspective you´re writing from? Is it your autobiography or is it devotee fantasies? Yes. A little (lot) more of the story is posted on the website. |
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Post by Inigo Montoya on Aug 11, 2009 7:43:31 GMT -5
I loved it. It's hard to wait on the next installment. :-)
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Post by aloha on Aug 11, 2009 11:15:14 GMT -5
Thanks, clover. It's really nice to get good feedback.
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Post by Dee Dee on Aug 11, 2009 17:52:00 GMT -5
Aloha, thanks for writing the story and sharing it with us. It´s not entirely clear to me, which perspective you´re writing from? Is it your autobiography or is it devotee fantasies? Yes. A little (lot) more of the story is posted on the website. Aloha, I think you´re a good writer ... although ... I find Ethan´s reality almost unbearable. I hope things will lighten up for him. When you said "yes" in the above, I´m not sure, what you meant. Which part of my question does that "yes" refer to? |
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Post by aloha on Aug 11, 2009 18:14:43 GMT -5
Don't worry, I'm a sucka for the happy ending.
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Post by Lee on Aug 12, 2009 6:26:29 GMT -5
Aloha: the story has received many hits on the counter but I've forwarded you the only comments I've gotten. I swear I'm not hiding any. Thank you for writing anyway though. I hope you'll continue.
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Post by aloha on Aug 15, 2009 17:20:11 GMT -5
I just sent the next part of my story to Lee.
For those of you who find Ethan's reality to be "almost unbearable", you're probably not going to like this next part. So sorry in advance. But I promise the next part is going to be an incredibly happy ending.
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Post by Inigo Montoya on Aug 15, 2009 20:05:07 GMT -5
Man, you had me dreading it.  But I really like Ethan's attitude, even with all that he's dealing with... I think he deals with it well. I'm looking forward to the happiness to come. |
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Post by aloha on Aug 16, 2009 13:09:20 GMT -5
Thanks, clover. I'm working on the ending now and am almost done, so I may send it out tomorrow.
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Post by aloha on Aug 20, 2009 19:31:24 GMT -5
The last part of the story was posted today. I'm considering a sequel if there's sufficient interest.
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But I really like Ethan's attitude, even with all that he's dealing with... I think he deals with it well. I'm looking forward to the happiness to come.