I guess I'll throw my thoughts in here as well. I have to admit that I am having a very hard time getting through the story. I'm not a writer and was never good in literature classes so can't figure out how to convey what the issue for me seems to be. Maybe its that don't care about the characters. The story seems dry maybe, I don't know. I'll try again today but got to about the same part as Ruth.
I can't help but focus on what just doesn't seem right. It seems as if the writer knows a lot about the military and sci but there are some things that just don't sit right with me. For example: he says he had to give up his wheelchair at airport security and ride to the gate in a airport chair. That just doesn't happen and I don't understand where the writer got the idea that this happens. I always see guys in their regular chairs going through security.
Thank you! I'm glad I'm not the only one who found it B-O-R-I-N-G. I selected this story because you all love Avatar so much, although I admit I am not really a fan myself. Also the first few chapters looked promising. So I thought I'd include it as a favor to you all, but in the end it was like punishment having to read it. I didn't get a devo tingle from it at all, which I thought at first was just my own preferences. But I'm glad you guys agree. It didn't resonate with the Jake in the movie at all, and the writing gets drier and drier as it goes along.
But maybe we're wrong. Did anyone enjoy it? Did it give you that devo thrill?
I have to agree with all the comments so far...although I haven't finished it. I started reading great guns for the first few chapters and made it to about chapter 7 but I haven't been that motivated to go back to it, it just didn't have the thrills I expected. Maybe it has something to do with having seen Avatar and thinking about it since, having it be a bit of fantasy fodder..the story couldn't live up to that. I'm not sure but I'll try to finish it in case it changes my mind.
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Post by Be As You Are on Jan 21, 2011 15:35:24 GMT -5
I finished it last night and I too had trouble getting through it. It held little dev factor for me, I don't know why. I'm an Avatar fan, but this particular character portrayal of Jake did nothing for me. Ruth made a good point, I agree that fanfic is probably harder to write because we come to it with a preconceived notion of the character. Props to all the authors who take on the challenge!
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Although we all agreed we did not like the Jake Sully story the 5 of us had a great discussion. Where were the rest of you? I guess maybe we should not pick a Friday night as dev discussion night again!
Yes, where the hell was everyone? All you people who voted for this story disappeared But as Emma said, we had a great conversation with a small group, big thanks to everyone who participated! I really enjoyed talking with you all.
In the end, we didn't talk about the story much because most of us didn't like it, but just to summarize my reactions in a little more detail, I think part of the reason this story was perhaps doomed to failure was because it is essentially a prequel, it has to get Jake to the moment the film starts. But the author wanted to tell a SCI recovery story with a romance, where Jake comes to accept himself post SCI, which is at odds with the character at the beginning of the film, who is angry and directionless. So the character arc and characterization just don't work. The author would have been better off just writing a completely original story.
The author seemed really knowledgeable about medical stuff, but some of the action didn't make sense, like the scene where Jake goes down the stairs on his stomach. WTF? I've seen SCI guys go up and down stairs, usually they sit on their butts and pull themselves with their arms. All I could think was if he slid on his stomach his pants would come off. Also there are a lot of scenes of Jake being carried around by his marine buddies. Again, WTF? I kept hoping it would go in a slashy direction, but no such luck. If you can't put slash in fanfic, what good is it?!
What really killed it for me was how unrealistic the dialog was, and how much of the character development was put directly in the characters' mouths: saying things like "Jake has learned blah blah blah" etc. rather than letting it come out through his actions. Rule #1 for fiction: SHOW rather than TELL.
Anyway if you did read the story or at least part of it, don't let my ranting discourage you from posting.
Well, I voted for the Jake Sully fanfic, as I was quite pleased with the film, but I must admit I did not get to read it ... I found it VERY long and simply could not find the appropriate amount of time ...
I thought of participating in the Skype session nonetheless, but since 8 PM EST is 2 AM GMT+1 where I live, it is hard to keep oneself awake on a Friday night ... I´m sorry .
Can we read something shorter the next time?
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It seems the combination of a boring story and the Friday night made it hard for people to participate. There will never be one time that works for everyone, but I think we should go back to weeknights, that seems to work better.