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Post by happyface2013 on Oct 2, 2021 9:12:12 GMT -5
A link below to my latest short story. I think I made a good job of it.
Always enjoy hearing feedback -
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Squalor
Oct 2, 2021 13:25:07 GMT -5
via mobile
Post by blueskye101 on Oct 2, 2021 13:25:07 GMT -5
Read it and enjoyed, though straight to bed too blokey for me 😉 Love the beginning when they notice each other and how they get together.
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Post by happyface2013 on Oct 10, 2021 7:57:41 GMT -5
Thanks for the feedback. I added a new chapter and some other changes based on your comments.
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Post by blueskye101 on Oct 11, 2021 23:01:48 GMT -5
“ I’m not a perv or anything” Best line. Lol
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